Clear and to the Point

9 September, 2010

Beware too many words

Filed under: editing,plain language,technical communication,writing — monado @ 13:25
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Here’s a sentence from a job ad:

The successful candidate must be available to commence the duties of this position as soon as the selection process has been made.

I prefer the usual form:

You must be able to start immediately.

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1 Comment »

  1. I love it! Information served with dry wit, and all in only four sentences.

    Comment by tbreeden — 10 November, 2011 @ 13:44 | Reply


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